I’ve never seen her this way before. So happy and
uncaring, it’s euphoric and very overwhelming seeing her like this. I wonder if
she knows ten years from then she is going to be in a series of loveless
marriages one of which will be the death of her.
Her posture seems very out of place and awkward, it’s
almost as if she where already preparing her self for harsh back pains that she
will begin to have after experiencing a very painful fall onto her back in the
near years to come. Or could already be preparing her self for harsh back curls she
will unwillingly and so helplessly have to do once becoming five months
pregnant with a beautiful girl who she will then name after the month ‘April’.
Also if you look close enough into the picture you will
see a tiny but noticeable wrinkle right between her eyebrows where have been lifted
to show the horror and tragedy she will have to overcome throughout her
Fifty-Six years of living.
Though short this is very powerful, it flows so well and shows us her life was hard even though we don't even know her or her life. The only suggestion I have is to get rid of the two "very"'s to strengthen the sentences they are in. Very well done though (:
ReplyDeletePlease write more!!! There is so much more that can be said, let down your walls and write it all out. Please! Its so beautifully written already. This is probably my favorite line, "I wonder if she knows ten years from then she is going to be in a series of loveless marriages one of which will be the death of her." You have written it so well and add insight to the future. WRITE MORE!
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